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  1. Kristin B (Guest) on Chapter 6 Mon 20 Jun 2016 06:08AM UTC

    I love this story and the one that came before it! It's often difficult for me to get into original works but you have done a fantastic job! The characters are believable, develop over time, and are dealing with relatable issues in their lives. My one piece of criticism (not really, just a heads up) is that you have established that James can't read, but he started his communication with Hal and John over email. Since the fact that James is illiterate is a major part of the story you may want to change how they communicated in the beginning or say that James used a dictation program to write his emails and had the computer read the emails to him. Or that someone from the library helped him. I hope I have been helpful and that you will continue to write! You are amazing and I look forward to reading more!

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    1. TheGriefPolice on Chapter 6 Mon 20 Jun 2016 08:39AM UTC

      Haha! Yeah, I realized that as I was writing it because I was spacing it out between one of my other stories, and as I was reading over it again (one of the ways I often get back into writing a story) I noticed that!
      Thank you for bringing it to my attention, though! If I had missed it, that would have really sucked and I really appreciate you bringing it up! I know it's not always easy to do that.

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