Comment on Mass Effect 10 Ben Second Chance

  1. Guest_Commenter_1 (Clutch_of_Creations) on Chapter 24 Mon 23 Dec 2024 02:27PM UTC

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    I have been enjoying this story though the text formatting could use some work. I've also noticed several spelling errors. I'd recommend taking a look at the free program Grammarly. I've been using it for a few years and have found it helps me a lot.

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    1. Commander_Benguin010 on Chapter 24 Mon 23 Dec 2024 03:36PM UTC

      Thank you for the suggestion but I do not like Grammarly for several reasons some are petty reasons honestly. I’m glad you enjoying the story though.

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      1. Guest_Commenter_1 (Clutch_of_Creations) on Chapter 24 Tue 31 Dec 2024 06:24PM UTC

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        I get that. We all can be petty at times about things. One recommendation is to work on formatting what you write better. I don't know what type of device you are writing with but something that will enhance the appearance of your work is to ensure each speaker has their own paragraph and make sure that you've got their semtsmces fully enclosed within quotation marks.
        The other thing is read through your chapter once or twice before posting it to catch any typos and pick out on hard to read sentances.
        Finally, I recommend working to write things in past tense. I went to a writer's educational retreat this year and it was a major take home point for me. When we tell a story feom our own lives past tense is far more natural since to us it is something that has already happened. And it applies to fiction as well.
        Keep writing, the story you have is one I want to see you bring to its conclusion.

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        1. Commander_Benguin010 on Chapter 24 Tue 31 Dec 2024 08:44PM UTC

          Okay first off. normally when I say the reason for not focusing on my grammar and stuff people don't replay. so thank you honestly for that. I do at least give my chapters a once over, I just have that problem , it in front of me but I still miss it but I will do more look overs maybe that help me get better.

          with each character has they own paragraph that I trying my best as that be my most vocal fix for me. same with the past tense stuff. ( did not know the name of term before hand till). thanks for the advice really this helps. I might looked into software's like Grammarly but I need one that help with British and American language. Mainly because I am from Britain.

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